Back when Summer mornings kissed my face
with a child's lips, soft and unlined,
history unwritten
They stretched themselves out
like promises along
the track of the Boston & Maine
shaking me from my bed
with freighted rumblings
We ran ahead of it, our childish laughter
mocked its plodding
our youthful agility a gift we took as a promise
history unwritten
back when afternoons baked summer
ochre into our skin and we colored
our dreams with the infinity laid before us
history unwritten
our music cicada's chainsaw
cutting through the trees
the call answered
by the carpenter's hewing buzz
when uncertainty was weighted only
on the end of a plank
our sawhorse mount
when evening held back as long
as the sun could be cajoled to shine
and when it fell was light upon our minds
no fearful thing lived in that night
the stars, re-lit by unseen hand
burned holes in its curtain
and if one dashed across the sky
it carried our happily everafters
in its lightning wake
history unwritten
the tracks of smooth and seamless days
the maps of our childhood's path
disappear into jungles untended
erasing ties to days of abandon
and trains move swiftly on new tracks
as youth gives way
to caution, dreams to schedules,
as age takes the pen
racing the lines down the page
before history writes the end
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Boston & Maine
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Re: Boston & Maine
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Anonymous
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 06:43 AM EDT | Permanent Link
This evokes so many memories for me of a happy carefree childhood. A time when we were the centre of the universe living and loving in the moment. Memories of a happy childhood can be revisited when we need to escape for a time in order to re-energize.
Thank you Ned emma www.livejournal.com/users/emma_furlong Re: Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 06:51 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
So, what are you saying, you mean I am not the centre of the universe now?
Thanks Emma for a lovely comment and you felt what I hoped to convey. Thanks for posting your URL too. Re: Boston & Maine
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Mark
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 08:51 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
WOW! I need to take some time to absorb this one. You transported me. This is too much. Memories of my own childhood come flooding. You've inspired me once again Ned, and managed to shift my writing focus from trees to childhood.
I would love to maintain a poem of this length. It's not easy to flesh out a poem without bloating it with excess, unneccesary verbage, at least for me that's the case. There was none of that here Ned. No wast, no filler. Well written. Re: Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 06:45 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thank you Mark. We all have those childhood memories that flood over us, and at a distance it is more the feelings we remember, so it wouldn't have been possible to fill it with a lot of unnecessary words, like memories, it is snippets of color, sounds, feelings. I am glad you appreciated it. I don't normally do poems of this length either, I think I am usually too lazy.
Re: Boston & Maine
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ME Strauss
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 10:27 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
I am most taken by the final paragraph. I sense it moves a bit faster, which would be appropriate for that time of life, but I can't figure out what it is that sends me that feeling.
Like Mark, I will be thinking on poem for a while . . . and coming back to visit this it. Re: Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 06:47 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Time ticks on at the same pace always, only when we see the supply of it becoming shorter, do we sense an urgency - that is what childhood grants us, I think, timelessness.
Re: Boston & Maine
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Anonymous
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 04:31 PM EDT | Permanent Link
I remember when cajoling the sun to shine a little on summer evenings had to be set alongside my father calling me in for bed! A wonderfully evocative poem, which reminded me of some of the earlier stories of Ray Bradbury. Do you happen to know "Dandelion Wine"? I enjoyed this very much, Ned. Thanks. Ken
http://strangerken.blogspot.com Re: Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Thu 25 Aug 2005 06:53 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
No, I don't know it Ken. But I googled it and surprise, google supplied me with a copy. Must be some of that publishing of copyrighted material they have been up to. Now that I know where to find it, I may have a read.
I remember when it seemed the sun would never completely sink out of the sky, long summer evenings that we stayed out until 8 or 9 pm and still had light. Thank you for your kind comments, Ken. I am glad you enjoyed this one. Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Fri 26 Aug 2005 06:27 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Oh Thank Goodness they fixed it. I thought I was going to be stuck in July forever.
Re: Boston & Maine
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Anonymous
on Sat 27 Aug 2005 09:30 AM EDT | Permanent Link
Re: Re: Boston & Maine
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Ned
on Sat 27 Aug 2005 09:50 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Sometimes I want to go back too.
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