Through these woods now aflame more brightly than
When a warmer sun made their filter green
My wandering path a stone fence follows
Of the unknown someone who held a deed
I want to see the hands that built this wall,
The construction of his life's boundaries
Chose one stone and rejected another
So neatly set one next and one upon
Were his hands like the hands of my father
Craggy knuckled mountains and blue rivers?
The rough hands of a farmer and framer
Whose work separated but does not fall
Though seasons and frosts may cause upheaval
And feet tread where they were not meant to go
The tresspassers were taller than these trees
When it was built and dryly set in time
A winding marker whose lines no longer
Make declarations, call the land by name
A simple and lowly expression of
The land's adoption and yet, by whose hands?
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The Stone Fence
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Re: The Stone Fence
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garnet
on Sat 22 Oct 2005 03:04 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Ned- the hands call up the human structures of the place through the constructions left behind. nicely done.
just one thing. Who/what are the tresspassers taller than trees? were the trees shorter then? Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Sat 22 Oct 2005 03:09 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
I imagine Garnet, that when the fence was first built, the trees there today, tall and strong, were but saplings or perhaps not even yet sprouted - the tresspassers then, when it was built, were taller than those trees that now stand towering. My way of expressing the time that has passed since the fence had meaning.
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garnet
on Sun 23 Oct 2005 11:04 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Of course, Ned. As you can tell I almost got it as i commented. It's a nice touch.
I studied this awhile, learning from its economy. I'm grappling with seeing the words instead of my visions or emotions when I poetize. I lose too much in the translation. Re: Re: Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Mon 24 Oct 2005 05:16 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
I understand Garnet. Sometimes I am quite wordy in my descriptions and setting out of scene as in The Dandelion. At other times the meaning requires a starker imagery using much less to be more.
For an example, might I suggest this poem? I Built A Cold Fire Re: The Stone Fence
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splittinghairs
on Sat 22 Oct 2005 04:51 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
I see two views from this one.
Who build this fence from a human view, and who built this world from a God view. Picking the stones to use and which to cast away, just made me think of a verse I read long ago. Two Poems for the cost of one, I liked them both when I read it twice. Great Read Ned! Janus Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Sat 22 Oct 2005 07:22 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thinking of Ecclesiastes Janus?
Yes, I can see the reference coming to your mind at that line. That is what keeps poetry alive, the perspective and ideas that readers bring to it. Thank you for sharing the way the poem made you think in two directions. That is a compliment. Re: The Stone Fence
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ME Strauss
on Sun 23 Oct 2005 03:29 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Janus' comment was wonderful.
I was taken by my memories of Massachusetts and so many such fences as you describe put up and overcome by the forest that would not be put down. What an appropriate and thoughtful question by who's hands? Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Sun 23 Oct 2005 08:27 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
I see them criss cross the woods and sometimes fields, wondering whose marker this was and pondering how it manages to stand all through the years. I am amazed at the skill with which the stones are set.
Isn't that what every person hopes to accomplish? Something that stands for them. Something of their hands or heart that stands for them after they are gone. Re: The Stone Fence
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glenni
on Sun 23 Oct 2005 09:23 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Many years ago when I travelled through England we passed through many parts of Hadrian's Wall. Your poem reminds me of this wall, with all its history, its dramatic past. Time moves on, yet the memory of those who have lived, dreamed and died on this earth still lingers on. They are not here to give meaning to their deeds yet the mark they have left lives on.
Glenni Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Sun 23 Oct 2005 09:19 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Perhaps blogging is just stacking words, leaving them to mark off our space and define our boundaries.
Thanks Glenni, I am thinking again. Re: The Stone Fence
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Blueskytavern
on Mon 24 Oct 2005 04:10 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Reminds me of a fort I visited in Grenoble, France. There used to be a road that leads up a hill to the fort and it was made of stone, and you could still see parts of a stone wall. I like to imagine what it was like when it was new. And wonder to myself if many people walk by this way in the past? And it's quite something that such structures have lasted a few centuries.
Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Mon 24 Oct 2005 05:20 AM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Sounds like that road and wall were much older but this is a newer country. These structures built by persons unknown who walked here before us tie us in some way to the past. It is impossible not to wonder about those who built them and those who walked this way before.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts on that Liz, similar experiences in different places by different people. It shows that we are all connected in some way, and how we connect to the past as well. Re: The Stone Fence
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Anonymous
on Mon 24 Oct 2005 05:23 PM EDT | Permanent Link
I'm reminded a bit of Robert Frost, not in the content but in the feeling for craftsmanship, durability as a bulwark against the passing of time, the relationship between men and nature and the slow, studied thoughtfulness with which you explore the key ideas. It's interesting that glenni and Blueskytavern are both drawn to old walls in their comments and that Garnet speaks about wanting more physical anchorage in his poems. I'm also reminded of the earlier poem you wrote, the title of which escapes me, about a carpenter. A very interesting poem. Thanks.
Ken http://strangerken.blogspot.com Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Mon 24 Oct 2005 09:24 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thank you Ken. I appreciate the thought you put into the reading of the poem and your comment.
The carpenter one, I think may be this one From Dust to Dust It was about my father, actually. Re: Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Anonymous
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 06:09 PM EDT | Permanent Link
That's the one, Ned. It's a beautiful poem.
Ken Re: Re: Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 06:44 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thank you, Ken. That one is close to me.
Re: The Stone Fence
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Remainderman
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 03:44 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Ned
Wunnerful, wunnerful. (Here, you must imagine vibrant accords leaping forth and hyaline bubbles rising up as a sign of my great approval and delight). From Dust to Dust is especially finely rendered. Remainderman Re: Re: The Stone Fence
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Ned
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 06:12 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thank you, Remainderman. Lawrence Welk will also always remind me of my father. Every blog needs a little music.
Even if we polka little fun now and again. oO(I went from Robert Frost to Myron Floren...) Re: The Stone Fence
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Anonymous
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 07:56 PM EDT | Permanent Link
I really felt drawn in by this one. It drew me a picture that I could enter. I love hands and the things wrought by them.easywriter
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Ned
on Tue 25 Oct 2005 08:44 PM EDT | Profile | Permanent Link
Thanks easywriter. As the offspring of a carpenter I too, have a love of things made by hands.
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